雅思教育类作文范文点评

　　雅思教育类作文范文点评

　　Score 1

　　Nowadays, many people think that the people who always telling the truth is the mostimportant consideration in any relationship between human, but another think that is necessary to tell some lies. It is seldom to reach the same issue. I agree with the first thinking because of the following reasons.First of all. we all live in the realized world, people can respect you unless you want to use correct method to communicate with other people. It is very important, especially in business. if you want to receive the good result.you must tell the truth about your own.Secondly, if you are honest man/woman. many people may be want to make friend with you. You can have more chance to communicate with other people. you may be gain more information from them.However. sometimes we must speak some lies. For example. when our relatives have heavy illness such as cancer. we couldn't telling them the true. because that not good for their health. and may be affect their life.In conclusion. telling the truth is the people's good behavior. we must require most of people to tell the truth. Thus, we can see the better world in our life unless we always tell the true. (206 words)

　　范文点评:

　　这篇文章有语言问题《几乎没有一句话是正确的)，而且语言问题都比较严，(无法理解的表达或者非英语习惯的表达，比如第二段中的“realized world’和'considement') ,第三段和第四段几乎无法理解。因此.本文只能得到1分。

　　2010年1月16日独立写作点评与示范

　　真题回放一Children should choose the jobs similar to their parents' or choose the jobs different from their parents.

　　Do you agree with this statement: It is better for children to choose the jobs of their parents?

　　资深老师点评:本题按照题材分类属于“父母，儿童教育和成长.类别中的父母与子女教育问题.在题库中与此类似的题目有:

　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older(15-to 18-year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

　　Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

　　从题目的提问方式Do you agree ?本文题材属于观点选择类.即投票题I.此类题I要求观点一定要明确.并对自己的观点进行沦述.通常只需要沦述一方面就可以了，非常庆幸的是这次的题目中有类似的，如果努力复习的话对学生们是十分有利的。因此正文段可以采取体现文法的1+1结构:

　　开头段:背景描述+表明观点

　　很明显，在大部分家庭当中给孩子影响应该是父母T , (Obviously. in most cases the earliest teachers people have are their parents. and parents are generally most concerned about the development of their children.)这种影响不仅体现在孩子们的早期学习和性格培养.同样也体现在孩子的前程表现为工作选择(job selection)上.most of people认为父母对于孩子理解深(know kids very well).因此孩子们应该选择与父母相似的职业.但是我并不这么认为。标签：雅思教育类作文范文